I simply love this photo, The style you used is perfect, it reminds me a lot of Tim Burton's Sweeney Todd. Where's there is a ton of saturation but for this pic there is just the right amount of color. Well done
This is a very dramatic image, and slightly strange - something you don't see enough of in fashion magazines. The lady's eyelashes are stunning, and quite the focal point. All I have to say is to be careful that the makeup doesn't take the attention away from the gorgeous clothes.
However, I truly appreciate the darker undertone of the composition, and I applaud you for taking such a potentially train-wrecking series of elements, and making them work with each other. This is a harmonious image, and you've made it exceptional with your angle and set up of your models.